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Tuesday, January 6, 2009

Hou Yi shoot donw the Suns

In lore after Yi with the goddess of the moon is the person of Yao time , mythology says , Yao time, on day, 10 the suns at the same time appear in sky, it is burnt to roast land , crops are withered and dry, people heat get pant however air come , fall in faint on the ground do not wake up. Because the cause of extremely hot weather is some to blame poultry beast of prey , is also from the place that dries up with flame forest in run , in every place, cruelly injure people.

The disaster of the world have alarmed the god on day, in day emperor frequently handsome order is good at archery after Yi go to the world , help Yao the suffering except people. After Yi tape day emperor grant the bow with red one that gives him , the arrow of a bag white colour, beautiful wife the goddess of the moon who still takes him arrives the world together.

After Yi the fighting that has begun to shoot day immediately. He takes out white arrow from shoulder except taking off the bow with red that, one aly to arrogant the sun shoot , instantly between 10 the suns have been shot 9, leave a the sun only because Yao thinks as people have advantage, after having just blocked Yi continuity shooting. This for is famous after Yi shoot the story of day.

2 comments:

instructor said...

THE TITLE IN INCORRECT.CHANGE THE TITLE AGAIN.

DONW IS SPELT AS DOWN.

instructor said...

USE SHORT SENTENCES:

REWRITE THE WHOLE PASSAGE!

EXAMPLE:
In lore after Yi with the goddess of the moon is the person of Yao time ,

ACCORDING TO THE CHINESE LEGEND, THE SUN GOD YAO LOVED THE MOON GODDESS YI.

PLEASE RE-WRITE THIS TEXT AGAIN OKAY.

KEEP IT SHORT AND SIMPLE OKAY.